All Comments on 'Revolution'

I loved the story, and the story-telling. You did a good job capturing the characters in small groups when they gather or form. Good dialogue. I love when authors share characters' thoughts & feelings (thanks for that). Oh! And the sex scene was hot, and spontaneous, and Lucas' inner experience of it was verrrry nice.

Sexy revolution is an idea that has merit, I think. It would be interesting how this story turns out (more chapters, please).

Hey GrrrreatImagination, glad you enjoyed.

Hmmm... given that this story is actually rated lower than most of my other ones... probably won't continue with it (Ideas usually come in moments rather than chronicles anyway... then again, if a good follow up idea strikes...).

Given that this story rated lower than usual, something presumably didn't work for most people... so... feedback is welcome, although obviously not expected.

Hmmm... Also it looks like something when wrong with the formatting during submission (Lost all italics which I had used to mark thoughts). I don't suppose there is any way of editing our submissions to correct that?

1. I had to do a bit of research here about how to get italics and bold and other such formatting to stay in in place. Go to the "How To" category in the story categories and look up the essay "Bold or Italic?" by one Alex de Kok. You can fill in the instructions to the administrator in the submission form telling her to preserve italics and such. Or you can add the HTML tags yourself if you paste the text into the box instead of uploading the file itself.

If you do the latter use the "new" submission interface; it's much more user-friendly.

2. You can resubmit a story with corrections. See the site's Frequently Asked Questions about submissions. It's called, "I've re-edited my story and want to replace the posted version with my new edited one. How do I do this?"

I hope this is clear.