All Comments on '"Rewritten" Passionate Encounter'

I am a bit confused with some of the written stuff. Why Ed took bella to a swingers club? Why Ed and Nadia went out? Why did Ryan straighaway flirted with bella. Are all part of bigger plan? I think Ed's chracter is very grey... but then its Bella's version... looking forward for 2nd part. I sent you a private message on some grammer mistakes.

Please be clear if you are writing an emotional story or thriller or erotica. Chapter 1 is all out emotional melodrama.

Thanks for taking out time to read my work. I am sorry for disappointing you and not submitting without proof reading or some grammatical mistakes. I will work on to I,prove as part of chapter 2.

This was a mess.

.....over the original.

Congrats for listening to the critics and starting over. There are some errors as others have pointed out but definitely a lot less than the first version.

The changed viewpoint also improves the story immensely.

I would still search for an editor to help smooth out the mistakes but a 3* this time.

As soon as her husband slapped her she should have gone for the divorce!!!! But no, she let him to habitually abusing her...No woman shouldn't that happen ever...for that 2*

Please please re-write IR again an

And correct the spelling and grammar 1 out of 10

Foreign language innacuracies lend more credibility tonthe story. Dont change. Hurry with part two. 5

Good start Ilook forward to more

In American terms trash. In English terms crap.