All Comments on 'Rich Bitches Get Their Deposits'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 19 years ago
Repetitious

Unfortunately what is a good scenario is too predictable - the two girls and the twin brothers doing everything in unison. But what is weak about this as a story is that the language is too repetitive. To be a good story it would need much more variety of language, more description. Sorry.

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