All Comments on 'Richard and the Seven Brigands'

Nice story with some excitement but it felt rushed in the telling (as in narrative) rather than the reader feeling as if they are experiencing it as it happened. For instance, we read what is essentially a summary of the battle with the brigands rather than living the thrill of it. With some expansion, possibly some creative flashbacks, and some additional dialogue to add interest, this could have been improved. Keep working on your writing and your techniques and you'll improve over time. Best wishes, SC.

Nice little story. You could have flushed it out some. You ever really describe what Cythnia looked klike. Thes size of the estate with tenant farmers and shop owners of what.trades. I did personally enjoy your the historical, emotional and period setting wrapup

Interesting story. I have to agree with SouthernCrossfire. Though you've done your research, and it shows, the reader needs to know more of what's going on in the Hero's head as each scene plays out, and dialogue would really help. As it stands, it sort of reads like a re-cap, instead of and action-filled struggle for life and death. You are a gifted writer, so keep writing. I'm looking forward to reading more from you.

Good story!

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