All Comments on 'Riddick's Concubine'

I felt you were overly descriptive with the stuff about where he came from and things form the movie. I mean people wouldn't be reading it if they didn't know who it was about. THe story had a good premisce I think you just need to trim off a little of the fat so to speak.

Great story. Wish it was more descriptive and longer though. Cant wait for more of it.