All Comments on 'Rise of a New Order'
by ashwoodtg
- 9 Comments
gargola1542about 1 year agoyes this was your first story,,, god this is amazing mixes you perfectly breast expansion, possession, gender change, mind control and a pinch of romance I loved it I hope to see a sequel or a selene spin-off (Google translator)
Anonymous8 months agoTo start of my review, I liked the general premise and writing of the story. Extremely strong showing for somebody's first story and rightly worthy of praise for the great writing of a great author. I want to point out and focus on some personal criticisms I had however, mostly due to my own tastes I acknowledge that left me a bit disappointed about the ending. I kind of felt like specifically once the MC transformation was complete the corruption was just too quick. The MC loses far too much agency for my liking (to establish the base level of his/her resistance) and the tension that could have been realised from MC grappling with some of the overt physical and mental changes were forfeited almost immediately to reach the conclusion of the story. I was surprised considering how everything was drawn out before wonderfully in this aspect of the story only to be speed throw towards the end. Although, this did not occur seeing as the MC mostly maintained there sense of self came across to me similar to identity death (which I normally find distasteful) absent of seeing the transition of the MC's ideals, motives and beliefs which were loosely established around the archetype of a character, leaving more casual readers of the genre little go on off. In saying this, I also thought some character background and motives were lacking that could have possibly added to the worldbuilding. Overall, the story was still great and I would recommend others give this a read if their interested in the listed tags, just this wasn’t for me unfortunately.
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