All Comments on 'Risky Business'

First as a whole I liked the story. It was a bit different than most and I can see a series here. Keep it up

As to the proof reader comment, it's not a deal breaker but have a good going over it to edit or have someone with fresh eyes. Some are typo but in paragraph 2 you refer to Vanessa as Felica?? There are other mistakes but I think you'll notice them if you give it a thorough look. Many writers use another person to proof their work. Yes, even the pros.

Good luck and keep writing.

I liked the story concept for a short story. I agree with the other poster about proofreading. Would like to read about "the next day" between the two.

"She called her Celene"

All downhill from there.