by K.K.
What a story!! Love it, always loved this type of story.well written and I love the suspence. Keepem comin! More chapters PLEASE
The story is full of details and suspense. Big Tony gave away pieces but there is no coherent picture yet!
Wow, this certainly is different. Murder, mystery and action. I'm not too sure how this fits in Loving Wives, but who cares?!
Please, do continue, I wanna know the why of it all.
Please, just publish the whole damned thing now so I can get my weekend work done without pondering the endless mystery and suspense you've built!
Please!!!
How did he get out of the basement coal chute window the first time? Could have been simpler and more consistent. But... that is a minor detail in a very good story.
Glad to see you posting again/ to answer grogers7 He said that he left by the backdoor in part 2
This is a very gripping mystery and I'm looking forward to seeing how it concludes. Nevertheless, I have a few critical concerns about this series. First of all, there are way too many typos, word misusages, tense disagreements and other grammatical errors in this installment for a writer of KK's caliber. Looks to me like it wasn't properly edited. Second, the story is set in a fictitious small town (I looked on the map), and Tom has lived there almost all of his life, and yet he has no friends or people in the town he can lean on, no cops or lawyers he went to high school with that can vouch for his good character or help steer him through this? I find that awfully hard to believe. Finally, it strains credulity that the detectives apparently haven't dug into Holly's background to find out why she was a target. Even if they assume Tom did it, a good cop explores every possible avenue to discern motive, and since it wouldn't take much to learn that she showed up at the diner literally out of nowhere, I would think they would at least appear to make an effort to find out where she came from and why she left. But that doesn't seem to be happening here. Maybe it will in subsequent chapters. Like I said, this is a pretty good story and it's nice to see KK back contributing again. Hope my concerns are answered soon.
I thanks you for posting a chapter a day and for taking the effort to entertain us readers so well. There are good stories on here. One just has to know where to look.
Well plotted and very exciting and taut with tension. Good read!
I really love the way you write. I've been reading each new chapter and love the way the story is developing. The pacing is great. The plot is interesting. I spent more time yesterday looking at this story than I did my own. Can't wait for the next one. Great job
This story is every bit as good as you story "The Stein" (it's comparable to this story) and "What really happened in Vegas" and the superb story about David Beckman rise from his problem in "The fall and risel of David Beckman."
At this point in the story I am wonder whether the explosion at the old house where Slim, Pug and Big Tony where staying had destroyed the hidden recording instrument. Well, on to Chapter 4.
At SOME point they will be investigating the explosion, and at a minimum they will find bodies that match his descriptions.
I'm done. Bored to sleep. Is all of your work like this??
This is a decent mystery story. The problem, is this category is LW not "True Crime." The author should have submitted this story to an appropriate site rather than Literotica.
How many goods did he blow up in the house? This is still a very good story. Looking for a finish.