by robbie_krt
The story was ok, maybe even good The writing was bad. You need to get an editor to help you out with it, and then resubmit it.
Good first story, but please work on your writing. Bumpy in some areas, but nicely done.
Loved the story...would love to hear more and also about the party!
These are the stories I most enjoy. Of age younger straight guy being taken by an older experienced man. Love the naive outlook that got you into a situation that most of us would kill to have. Punctuation doesn't bother me when I'm lost in a good story.
I am really looking for a old experience top to force fuck my tight virgin cherry bum,I'm from Scotland and it's really hard to meet men
You are such a nasty little slut Roberta! You were designed to suck cock and have one buried inside your tight boi pussy. Would love to tear up that hot boi pussy myself. Such a good little whore!