by orie
A nice start love the idea with the sexy Voya from across the way. And the love interest at work sounds like a sexy little girl.
Love the reverse voyeur angle where the female is initiating the conversation. Artemis sounds like a neighbour I would enjoy. Great character development and an enjoyable story line. Well done.
I like your story, I really do. It's very good and so is your writing. Well done.
But the reason I clicked on it was because of the 'lesbian lovers' tag. I came here expecting lesbian sex. And until you mentioned Kyle's dick, I thought Kyle was an unfortunate woman who got stuck with a man's name. It's my humble request that you remove that tag. I know what you're referencing with it, but it is misguiding since it doesn't pertain to the main story. Thanks.
No one commented yet?
Well, I for one can't wait to read the next chapter. I'm enjoying the story and really like Kyle. Seem's to be a solid catch..... and Artimis, is she much older? Can't wait to see whats going to happen with Ferry.
Josie
Loved this series of stories. Very well written and they grab your interest. They not only are sexy and fun to read but have a well planned plot and twists and turns.
Well done.
It's wonderful to have characters who are attractive but with real weaknesses and troubles. I like the interesting 3-way inter-relationship building.
I can relate to the voyeuristic/ exhibitionist appeal of apartment living.... Some interesting things happened for me in such a setting.
This has definite possibilities, looking forward to reading more.
One thing I will say is that I don't believe in pointing out errors myself because I know for a fact that I couldn't do better in most cases.
Thanks-very interesting. A few nice 'errors' too-I loved the way he made a 'racquet' when exercising, with the rope perhaps?
I liked the excellent character development.
So many possibilities from this start!
One minor spellcheck error; discrete does not mean the same thing as discreet. That one bugs me, and it's happening more and more often, and from many different authors. That leads me to believe it's a spellcheck error, rather than the author's, but it's still distracting.
What great writing...great character development....great, real life descriptions...great all around. Enjoyed this very much!
Hey Orie,
Just to let you know and confirm I love love love this story. you have a wonderful imagination and don't stop
Blaggs