All Comments on 'Rooms to Rent'

You write well.

I will be waiting for the next chapter ...

One hopes this is a part 1 of many?

Btw, you need to look at your sentence structure a wee bit. Read the first couple of paragraphs aloud to yourself: you'll see what I mean immediately.

Truly awful writing. Give up!

I’ll be honest. - this was an old one I wrote whilst drunk... I probably should have edited it before posting it but I forgot.

Useful criticism and advice is welcome...