All Comments on 'Running into Bed'

please get an editor.

That was a very interesting story to read.

Don't put xxxxx,, this is fiction, make something up. PLEASE

Firstly, why are you putting xxxxxx in for the places, names etc. it's a story so have you not got any imagination that you can't make up any place names? Doesn't make any sense. When do you ever read a story that has anything like this?

You really need an editor and someone to go over your grammar and writing issues