All Comments on 'Sacrilege'

Almost interesting but Incest? How?

1 star

DragonRider55

The very best sacrilege. 5 stars to counteract the ungenerous 1.

I'll give you credit for trying; but you really should study some of the other stories found here.

Simply put, you showed us a long story, but I had to start skimming to finish it. Try using dialogue to add some drama, but before you do, read the article/s here in Lit's helps section. BTW I must have missed the Taboo aspect. Strange...

Good Luck! cd

to the story. Also, I would like an ending where they are nearly caught but fate saves them.

Beautifully written and paced. The eroticism grew as the story progressed. But the end seemed to me like a cop out. Unless it leads to another chapter that continues.

Really liked it.

Not sure about anyone else but my thoughts it clearly belongs in the taboo section of Lit considering what they are doing and where is very much taboofor the church.

Not a bad premise. But as has been said, but dialogue was sorely needed. And the story as it was laid out, really lent itself to a longer story. Plus we really needed to know if they were actually caught, and if so, what were the consequences? Finally, I get tired of the whole 'taboo' argument. Yes, I like almost everyone else, wish Lit would break this category up. But as it stands, no matter how often the 'it's taboo' argument is made, when they see a story under this category, the vast majority of people, myself included, think incest. And sadly, there was zero incest. Not a bad little attempt, but work is needed.

I personally enjoyed the aprodisiac of the unspoken desire. What most writers cannot accomplish is portrayal which you absolutely nailed. These comments about dialog are absurd to be honest, half the stories with dialog are so stale that by the end of the first conversation you see just how limited a persons' vocabulary is. The ending was solid because it doesn't say what happens, leaving room for maybe another soul to stray from the path (hint hint). I really hope there is more to this particular story as it seems there is so much that could actually happen when that door swings open. 5 stars

Holy fuck I came twice reading this. So sacrilegious🤤

But it's absence is the point! The had to be quiet because THEY WERE IN A CHURCH!

What do you want? For her to scream out "Oh sweet Jesus, fuck me!" Or for him to scream "Oh yeah, that's some good head baby!" Or for him to say "Excuse me preacher, but can you keep it down with the sermon, I'm trying to get some pussy here." The point was that they NEEDED to be quiet, or they would get caught before they began. Use some common sense. If you want dialogue, then go to church. If you want fucking, then go to ...... church?

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