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UltimateHomeBodyUltimateHomeBodyalmost 5 years ago
Confused

Why did he stop wanking in the shower? See no reason for him to not spurt. He had no promise of sex as he thought she was a lesbian, and being 20 he should have at least another 5 spurts in him for the night. So little worry of running out.

penguin2000penguin2000almost 5 years agoAuthor
@UltimateHomeBody

Thank you for your honest criticism. I should have explained his internal reasoning for doing it so that it would be logical, at least in his own mind. Thank you for helping me become a better writer. I don't know if I can actually make edits on an already uploaded story. But hopefully your criticism will help my next story be better.

dwr0242dwr0242over 4 years ago
Love it!

I love the story just the way it is. It's a real turn on for me!

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I've wanted to write for years and now I've finally made myself sit down and do it. My first stories are probably what would be called "stroke" stories. Most of them are my fantasies, some with a kernel of truth, and some are complete fiction. I eventually hope to move onto wr...