All Comments on 'Sandra is Inquisitive'

Too many people it got hard to follow. Keep writing but reduce the number of people or do less jumping from person to person from one sentence to the next.

Your sentences are all too short. Join them together. It is boring to read otherwise.

And the dangling participle "Walking into the bar, the music was recorded Eighties hits" is classic. The music wasn't walking into the bar, was it?

the short sentences makes it more interesting. most of these people have been in your other stories, so for me following them is not difficult. You may want to refer readers in your intro to your 2-3 most recent stories and let them know that if they haven't read them yet reading them first could be helpful. not critical - but helpful. that may help reduce some of the comments. BTW - 5 STARS. great erotic story.