by Nemasis Enforcer
As a fellow Santa I know the fruits of the mission.
You start your story on Dec. 20, you end you story with Santa has 10 more days for this gig. GYST! Get Your Shit Together!
i tink she was full of herself and hats why the boyfriend left her. "here i am dress like a sex godess" is not what she said is how she said it or you wrote she said it
Let me give you a bit of advice. True sensuality is never obvious. You must make your characters believeable, for one thing. Next, you don't need to talk about a thong going in the crack of the ass. You started off your story on a good note; your boyfriend dumping you but you weren't letting it bother you (the character). But you lost me aftre too much description and cheap details. A sexy lady with class, eventually doing something naughty, is a far sexier story than someone letting others call her a slut because she's passionate. A woman doesnt have to be a slut to love sex or be passionate. Good luck dear.
M.