All Comments on 'Sarah's Catfight Adventures Pt. 17'

More please.

This is the first one of these I've given one star. It was very disappointing after such a long wait. The story is too crowded and all the random couplings are watering it down. Two girls, engaged in a secret and kinky romance has the potential for a poignant narrative. Six girls randomly pairing off from chapter to chapter severely dulls the impact of the story between your main characters. It was nice to have a Britneycentric chapter, but it's a shame that it came in service to the stories two weakest and grating characters. I will likely give the next chapter a try, to see if you stop spinning your wheels and move the plot forward. Strip it down and get back to basics. Dump the side characters. They're terrible.

That was pretty disappointing. There's an increasing focus on their friends, but very little is said about what Sarah is thinking or why she takes the actions she does. Britney is a little more fleshed out, but a lot more could be done. I'll give the next chapter a shot. Thank you for taking the time to write these.

Not too fond of the other characters either. Sex was a bit off this time too.

Yummy, as always, but hell, what do I know...