All Comments on 'Savior Ch. 25'

Well by reading the comments you can see that length of chapters is a serious issue in a rather good story. I hope yourfuture stories will take that into consideration. Some chapters like this one are so short that they seem incomplete.

As far as the story goes I do not see much issue except I would have thought Rand would have clued in some of his cop friends by now. Especially after the had to clean up 5 bodies and the increased activity of all the families moving to the yard.

The last two chapters are great but I agree with the last commenter about the length. An editor probably could help you.

5 for both chapters

Pacing has become a serious problem. I accidentally skipped this chapter and was able to read the next one without having really missed anything.