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AnonymousAnonymousover 4 years ago
Explanation needed.

Your story was entertaining, but needs some embellishments. Jennifer gave no reason for her actions other than that she didn't know why she walked out of the locker room clad only in her underwear. As a scientist she should have known that she would have been on the floor for days for the cut on her hand to have healed. Perhaps some explanation as to the process that she was running to give a reason for her to have responded as she did.

AnonymousAnonymousover 4 years ago
A Story?

A story - or some sort of tech manual?

This is not, in any way, either an easy or enjoyable read.

I suspect English is not your first language,. (either that, or you have learning / developmental issues), but you should know your limitations and get some editing help before submitting anything else.

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