All Comments on 'Second Time Around'

I really read every word and thouroughly enjoyed it but I only rated 75 because it was way too good to be true . It was very guy's dream come true and I doubt anyone has really been so lucky .

Awesome, please keep writing, you have a very brilliant ability

Awesome, please keep writing, you have a very brilliant ability

Too bad you bought a Ford.

It was a good read, but some part of me was a little weirded out by the third generation of incest spawn. You forgot to put the part in about the grandkids having no arms.

reads a lot like JH-1's broken homes are you jh and if so why not think up a new story if not use your imagination way to similar to broken homes both are even on a lake in texas

til d 3rd ch its gd, bt thn thr is 2 much of incest . .gts cnfusng. .

I liked the story but the second half had to much plot jammed in for the length, Pacing is learned through experience, so keep writing.

Very boring with little to no plot line. Aside from FUCK FUCK FUCK, there was little else happening. You do know that incest fucks up genes in babies right?

This was a very nice story. Thank you for writing it.

I love how this family of dads and moms, sons and daughters, brothers and sisters just keep on fucking. All the cocks are communal cocks, Same with all the cunts. If a male feels like sticking his big prick up his daughter's cute little cunt, or another feels like shoving his fat cock up his own mother's mommy-hole, or a brother gets the urge to blow his brotherly balls up his sis's pretty little twat--he just goes and does it. There's no end to the supply of family cocks and family cunts and family sperm--'cause all the males are fucking babies up the females. True family values.

You need to work on plausibility a little. At least a minimal amount effort to make the story and dialogue believable. Also, as others have stated, multi-generational incest isn't really something to be proud of. Babies coming out with two heads and one leg sort of thing.

Yeah, try to make it believable. That's the biggest problem with the story.,

Living on a lake and NOT teaching the kids to ski until they are 18??? No way.

he wasn't a cross trained Special Forces, Seal, and Ranger with a 12" x 5" weapon.

I made it up to half of page 2 ...

Everything is going way too smooth, way too fast

Not my kind of story, sorry

Come on guys and gals, remember this is a fantasy story in a fantasy genre.

Sure it was complex with all the in-breeding aspects, but please, inbreeding RARELY, read as extremely rarely, produce kids with two heads, three arms, or whatever visual anomalies...

Hell, it would be grand though if, in the extremely rare case, a boy could be born with two dicks! LOL

Well folks like some of the comments said, it just a fantasy and only the imagination of one writer. I enjoyed the story and quite frankly it was quite creative and well written and I enjoyed it. He finished it which is more than some writers can say on this site. Well done, gets my 5 star vote.