All Comments on 'Secrets Revealed Pt. I Ch. 04'

You deserve a higher score but it just isn't possible. Very moving - very much believable - as though we were there. Very Credible Author - A Story Teller of significance.

Thanks

With Very High Regard

amazing so far. Very well done indeed - I'm looking forward to part 2.

You made me cry.

I have one word for the author, brevity. Although your writing does show potential, it gets lost and wanders around apparently lost. Please don’t take the John Kerry approach to writing, taking 53 sentences to say what should be said in 3. This story should have been condensed into two chapters, at most. I admit to just skimming the last couple of chapters, since I wanted to find out what was originally hinted at. Alas, nothing happened.

You want brevity? Here it is:

They met. They fucked. The end.

That should make you happy. Now go away.

For those of us who find value in reading about richly written, non-cardboard characters with realistic motivations, actions, and consequences thereof, I say: Bravo Strickland83!

Summer love--so important at the time--but like summer, it ends. The imagery and description in your stories made me feel like I was there, with the characters. Good work, all around. I really enjoyed this series.