All Comments on 'Service with a Smile Ch. 03'

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TootsallTootsallabout 6 years ago
This is your first story...

I really think you could use an editor...or at least a better one. Aside from the previous name mix-ups it is generally called a “water pail” rather than “water pale”. A small detail but one that detracts from the overall writing. Still, I like where you are going with this theme. Keep working, don’t give up.

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