by wifeserver
Do really expect that a LW reader will got to BDSM to read the first chapter?
That hard, segmented, bendy thing running up the middle of your back? Well, son, that's a spine. Yeah, it's cool, ain't it? You're having an epiphany, and the first part of fixing a problem...
Dear author, stop...just please stop with this disciplined wimp bullshit. It is entirely derviative from countless other attempts at portraying a female superiority lifestyle as something to be envied. I am positive that should you think about story topics to write about you could come up with something a lot more original than this crap.
Has potential. Let's have some wardrobe, descriptions of fancy clothes add a lot to the visual.