All Comments on 'Setting Moon Ch. 06'

yay awesome chapter very well written cant wait to find out what will happen next.

LOVED IT

Okay, So I have to be a little bit of a hard critic. I think you need to either find an editor or get a new one. I found so many errors I found myself rereading parts just to make sure I understood what you where trying to say. I still believe you have a great idea here. But I think you writing needs some major work. This chapters writing was mediocre at best. I still find part where it seems that you are rushing to say something and then go off to a new topic very abruptly. Transitioning between complete thoughts and actions as well as ideas is critical to a well written story. I will keep looking to see how you improve and hope my advice can be of some help.