All Comments on 'Sex Dungeon Fun'

You don't do enough to sell the idea that she is enjoying this. A couple of very short statements can't balance the stronger descriptions of fear and pain. The same is true of daddy's claim of fun and implied after care for a rough session. It needs better balance or daddy and friend come off as assholes and she seems a doormat. Keep writing, just give us a reason to care beyond a sadistic wank.