All Comments on 'Sex in a Bottle Ch. 03'

but you really need an editor, or, at the very least, learn to us comas better. Almost every sentence is a run on sentence. It's very distracting having to reread so many sentences to be sure to understand the intended meaning. Spelling is bit of an issue too.

I'm looking foreword to the next chapters. The story line s very erotic and entertaining.

I could not follow anything in this chapter. I like chapter 1 and 2 - in those chapters I knew what was going on - guy gets a djinn, gets to fuck his mom. Then I start reading this chapter and it's all in Wonderland and these characters who I don't know who the fuck they are and it makes no sense. How is this chapter 3 when it has nothing to do with the first two chapters? Hopefully chapter 4 ignores this chapters and goes back to reality!

three directly follows. The only way to be confused is to not remember. REREAD 2.

I have read all three, I will say I liked 1 and 2 better, BUT I thnk this one is still good.

i like how you brought Gina in to the end. You have to hurry and bring the next one out because I want to see what is going to happen.

Do people not remember Alice in Wonderland? Picture this chapter as a REALLY SEXY version of Carroll's classic. Some erotic license was taken but I found it really, really good. One very big "thumb" (OK, maybe not that big) up...

I think this may be LostBoy's "fun" writing project and "Iron Rain" and "Evil Bitch" take a little more thought in the plot development department.

Cheers,

SQ

I read all three chapters and thought that they were all equally amazing. I would love a chapter 4 though. Just to explain Gina and bring things back to reality. The Wonderland twist was great though. I absolutely loved it your a great writer.

Don't forget to KEEP WRITING ;D

Yeah anonymous, I went back and re-read chapters 1-2 again, and I still could not follow what the hell was supposed to be going on in this chapter or how it relates to the previous chapters. It went completely off the rails. Chapter 1-2 were great, this was a waste of my time.

Umm...didnt she meet the Red Queen already in Chapter 2? How could she have not know that was her sister then? Thats the only WTF question I have..other then that..amazing. Just like the other 2 chapters. Looking forward to all up coming chapters from one of my favorite authors on this site.

I really enjoyed reading this, hope there are more chapters to come.

It's been nice, but seems incomplete. More chapters, Lost Boy?

This story is very good so far! Very creative and entertaining! Hope more is added to it, kinda disappointing to have it end in the middle... more please!

I really like this story i sure hope your going to finish it.

great story/parody PLEASE finish it!

The story is most enjoyable and I would very much like to see how it goes on to a very sexy end.

Would you please add more to this story?

Great story so far, please finish it

Don't leave us hanging here now, you difinitly need to add a damn shit load of story here, it is pretty good.

you have other stories with lots of chapters why not continue this one?

Surely you could have continued. There is so much to be resolved yet. "Tis cruel to leave your audience hanging thus, so three stars only is more than just.

Even if you don't continue this Series it was fun to read! Thank you for writing and thank you for the pleasures you give us all <3 Much love

Where is chapter 4?

I like the story hot and different hope you can find time to continue the chapters.

Loved it .... It needs to be continued!!

I was LMAO at some parts! Great story! 5 *'s! Please write more?

Would love to see more chapters in this saga

Incomplete stories suck...

I am just like everybody else. We need more

please do more of this story i love it so far

This is unfinished! :(

This was posted on 06/30/2012. Unfortunately, I don't think we're going to get any more of this series.