All Comments on 'Sex Store Sex FFM'

It could have been really good, but there were so many errors of writing--typos, bad grammar, poor word usage, etc. that it really detracted from the story. Also--really? The three of them right there on the floor in a public store where any number of other customers might walk in?

Fantasies are okay, but the details need to remain believable.

You can do better if you try harder.