All Comments on 'Shadow of The Wolf'

I really enjoyed it and hope you continue the story.

Keep going! Can't wait to see where this goes!

You just have to find your rhythm and go with it! This has the premise of a really good story. I'd find a editor though...the way you describe the surroundings are deep and driven but you need a little direction. That comes with experience and sound advice.

Good luck and I can't wait for the next chapter!

I thought it started well, looking forward to seeing where it goes.

on your first submission to Lit! I think you are off to a great start and I look forward to chapter 2. Can't wait to see Alex's reaction when she realizes the man in the picture is at the party. And what of Rance, what will his reaction be?

Again congrats. And here's hoping chapter 2 is not far behind!

I agree, congratulations! I can't wait for the next chapter.

great start, needs a little tweaking here and there, but wow liking it so far

The story line itself is good. But you need some help with the grammar part of it. If you fix that part, it could be great. I still look forward to reading what happens. Thanks for taking the time to write.

You seem to be struggling with the use of present and past tense, to the point I almost stopped reading. This story has great potential, but I feel you are in need of an editor.

Keep Writing!

Uriziel

Congratulations I hope we don't a e to wait for the next I really can't wait.to read it

Wolf...forlon...25th aniversery...nice/very nice

so little time some little joy it's complicated

2 hearts is seeking 4 the sparks to work it on out

Yes please please please fix your grammar and tense before your next installment, as they are your only downfall. Great story none the less, keep at it.

Good first try. NIce plot starting

Get an editor to help iron out the wrinkles. Also try rereading what you have written aloud.

Your comments are very helpful to me. Since english is not my first language, I know I'll have errors in my work. Second chapter will be finished today, then off to the editor to iron out all the wrinkles. Thanks for reading and voting guys!

I agree with everyone else's comments - you obviously have a real talent for writing and this shone throughout the chapter. The main thing that was a problem was your use of tenses, as others have said. You were switching tenses a lot, even sometimes in the same sentence. Having said that it didn't really bother me too much, because I just 'read' the right tense in my head, but it's better to be correct! For story-writing you should generally use the past tense. Keep going, I know that can be really difficult when English isn't your first language. I'm really looking foward to reading more of this story! I liked it a lot. Off to Ch. 2 now..

I love where this story is going so far, so mystical and yet real. It's also nice to find a story for once where the male might look past the physical appearance to the soul. There truly can be a prince for every woman. :)

From what I have read so far this is going to be a fun story to read.

.....Rance de Montfort and Damian Beau?

Really?!?!

Sorry if that offends you, but for some reason those names had me cackling like a maniac. ;-D

very nice i truely enjoy werewolf based sex stories and this promises to prove quite.....entertaining.

I'm sorry, but that word and voluptuous just turn me right off. I find that the use of an overweight heroine or hero seriously detracts from the 'fantasy' nature of stories. I want to read about 'hot' women and men. Not chubbie bunnies.

@ the comment below mine.

Chubby = Curves

I could care less about the appearance of the characters.

It will not deter me from reading this incredible story.

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If you don't like a woman with curves then don't read that part. Not every character can appeal to every reader.Another thought to consider is that just because a woman thinks that she is not beautiful does not mean that others see it the same way.

Well three, really.

1) Huzzah for maniacal cackling;

2) Great start; and

3) "Chubbie bunnie" is a bit too Barbie-ish, don't you think? I mean it brought to my mind flashbacks of the Rumpshaker video.

So I liked the story, but I had a bit of a problem with your title for Rance, "alpha rex". I wouldn't have brought it up but it was used several times in one paragraph and each time I read it it cut me a little deeper. This is because I am an Ancient Language specialist (and lecturer/teacher so correction is in my nature) and "alpha rex" could never, ever, be linguistically possible because "alpha" is Ancient Greek and "rex" is Latin. The best you could get would be "rex primus", Latin for first king. Ancient Greek is trickier as they use a different alphabet. It was an original idea, unfortunately for you, you can't just shove random words from different languages together and hope it makes sense. It doesn't. Sorry...

More cushion for the pushin'. Mmmm, mmmm, mmmm. Banging bones hurts. But different strokes for different folks' stroking.

The part with the wolf licking her stomach and making her giggle was great. Haven't come across that as of yet on this site and it was a nice touch. It is sort of nice that the female isn't some gorgeous eye candy as well.

Darling-

Why are you so anal about the language combination title Alpha Rex?

Who gives a shit if the words are from two different languages?

We're reading a story not doing a doctoral dissertation. Lighten up,

enjoy and never mind being such a nit picker.....really ...chill out!!!

I had more issue with the name Rance....but she's the author...her choice.

lol...lol.

One word 'fabulous'!!!!!!

Great start to your story. I like that the central female isn't perfect and from the sounds of it, Rance is quite temperamental. Looking forward to seeing how this plot unfolds.

Thank you for your efforts.

Cali

Love love love this story. Want more! Great job great writing

You need to update and post the next chapters .... Omg this is amazing

11 chapters then it abruptly stops, no ending. Very frustrating to read this long for no end of the story. Don't waste the time.

DO NOT READ THIS STORY, IT DOES NOT HAVE AN ENDING. SINCE 2014 NO UPDATES. IT IS INFURIATING TO READ 11 CHAPTERS AND SUDDENLY STOP AT A CRITICAL PART OF THE STORY.

That's what amateur authors do. They have to start and not finish sometimes, it's part of the learning process. Thanks for the warning, but really, it's not something to get angry about.