All Comments on 'David's Gift'

Don't make us wait to long for chapter two

I'm glad I got to read a story in this category that is finally hot.

Well done I agree this was very hot 5*

Hope you don't make us wait long. This was an amazingly hot story. More please.

well written and told. Incredibly erotic. More.

I loved going along for that ride - with both women. You managed to really make that work. Brilliant!

so many attempt you have created a triple 5

I loved it! Sexy! And it wasn't cliche. I hate reading stories that go through a women's measurements. There all around 110, blond with shaved pussies anyway. It wasn't over done. I felt for both women. I'm not sure which woman I'm more envious of...

So erotic...omg I loved it!

when?

Many attempt the changes in POV from one character to another and fall decidedly short, but you handled it so well (good use of italics!) as to enhance the tale. The moment when she realizes that Power Over Another is exciting her is a watershed, as is the moment the Girl realizes she is getting off on her public debasement.

Hot as hell, well written, well paced and erotic. Wish my wife had given me this for my fortieth!

Very well done. The public setting is creative and yet credible. The characters are captivating, and the text well written. Will be checking back for more works by this author.

Darn, can't edit comments. But it sounds below like my comment is disparaging and it's not meant to be, so please don't take it that way. It's meant to say that you did the exhibition well enough that I didn't want to see it end. Your writing is good and please write more. (wipes sweatdrop)

Very nicely done.

The beginning is somewhat confusing until you figure out the style of the writing. But once you do, it's captivating!!!

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I can't wait for more if this is just the beginning. Where do they go from here?

I found the italics confusing at first, but they really worked out well. I liked the two perspectives.

I keep coming back hoping for a second chapter. This is such a good story -- so well written, so well thought out. I really loved the dual perspectives; I simply cannot get enough of them. Definitely one of my top ten on Literotica.

Loved it! I'd love to read more about their adventures

I absolutely loved this story. The theme of a gradual seduction that turns into public ravishment was delicious. Please write more!

Love it! I like that the story is evolving, (a bit) unpredictable.

The switch between the two women's stories flow nicely, in other stories told this way, time jumps back and forth, this has a fluentness rarely seen.