All Comments on 'Shared Room with Other Couple'

Shows promise, but like a 17 year old, finishes to quickly! Needs more description of the sex at the end. Could use some editing, but that is minor once I adjusted to your writing style. I've sent you a message with some comments. Please respond if you wish to.

The language gave an innocence to the story that I liked. Shame it was over too quick and an initial slow build was rushed

Innocent start , nice natural buildup . Short little sexy description would have given eroti city.

The story become more interested if the end not finished urgently.

Even with all the proofing errors, with the build up... and then nothing!

Need more details about fucking expereince.