All Comments on 'She Only Got what She Deserved'

Please learn to write

Don’t loose the day job…

2 stars

This story had the clarity of a weird dream.

First congrats on your first story. Not sure if this would fit better in the humor category as it is way over the top and completely unrealistic. I really do thank you for not writing a hot wife/cuckold/sharing piece of crap - those really should have their own category - or at the very least warning labels. How about dialing it down and getting closer to reality next time?

Well done and well written.

Not sure what to say... Hmmm!

Glocks do not have a hammer.

You suck at writing…try sucking cock? U May find ur niche

I wanted to say "a little". But that was WAY over-the-top nonsense. Poorly written to boot. Try again.

What is that?

Riad is in Saudi Arabia

Silly, just Silly

Please do us a favor and stop writing

I chuckled. But its shit.

Is this an attempt at satire? No one can possibly think this is a story, right?

Right, get out of mom's basement and finish junior high.

Please tell me this is a parody.

No comment on this trash.

Thank you for the laugh. Well at least I assume it was written as a joke, because it has to be possibly the worst story ever posted on here.

Looking at scores readers didn't realise this was satire ... er it is isn't it?

Sad, pathetic tale!

3

It isn’t clear to me whether this is a failed attempt at parody or just a failed attempt at a story.

who writes this crap sorry stop reading after the first few lines

Stupid. Stop writing. Story more pathetic than a willing cuckold

She got hers, the old whore. He got his, too, TWO BEAUTIES!

should have started this fairy tale with "Once Upon a Time"

Glock 19 doesn’t have an external hammer. All Glocks are hammerless.

Awful

Dude. That was weak and downright silly.

You should've put this in the Humor section. You're going to get shredded here because a lot of "Anony-mouses" are going to take this seriously. I deem it "chuckle-worthy," so 4*.

Storyline lacked big time.

Laughable! What, he didn't hit the lottery before he left?

One of the biggest bullshit stories ever. I‘m really sad to have my time tossed by readind such crap.

Please have a story that borders on reasonable. There is absolutely nothing here but a story written by a young man fapping so hard that he can't be bothered to put any effort into this very simplistic, "I hate you and I'm perfect and wonderful" tale.

ridiculous

Glocks are striker fired and do not have hammers. Also, did he really walk up to his wife's lovers office with his pistol in his hand and no one noticed? Not bad for a revenge story, but a bit over the top on believability.

He pulled back the hammer on his Glock 19. I take it you know nothing about guns.

Absolutely terrible... waste of time.

Was this written by a junior high school boy?

Even the name Rock couldn't help this.

Riyadh??? That stupidity alone earned this terribly written excuse of a story 1 * 😎

I like the basic story idea, but hey make it at least somewhat real-ish.

This is so ... warped that it is not enjoyable.

"I pulled the hammer back with a tactile click"........Glock's don't have hammers...they're striker fired pistols.

A Glock 19 is a striker fired pistol. There is no external hammer.

Wow. What rock did you crawl out from under. You obviously know nothing of living in Arabia or you wouldn't have made yourself sound so stupid. Here's a suggestion, stop while you're behind and never try writing again.

Rather pitiful misogynist MC, and totally juvenile plot.

But adequately written for what it is.

S U C K E D!! Author did not even know that Glock

19 has no external hammer!

Yeah, right. Dream on. Negative 10 stars. Don't think it could get any worse.

A little over the top. But well written.

Joder¡ que historia más rocambolesca jajaja, Pero no te desanimes, animo¡

STUPID ! Could have been a lot better very easily but it isn't .

What a crappy ass story. He is a worse human being than his ex.

The impaired eraders here don't have a sense of humor. Hilarious. Nice parody of the BTB LW genre.

The fuck did I just read?

Just when you think it couldn’t get any worse, it does. It’s bad when there’s two one page stories in a single day you can’t get through.

Don't quit your day job!

Why would "chiseled hunks" want to fuck a fat ugly woman? Just because she's married?

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And what's the fascination with "steely, masculine shafts? Is he gay?

Pretty good satire, would've been more entertaining if the ridiculousness was turned up a bit.

Well done !!!!

Easily the worst story I have read so far this year . Didn't expect it to be this early .

Might I suggest you give up writing until such time as you have some kind of a worthwhile story to tell .

Most realistic loving wives story ever! Thanks, I needed this.

Sadly, he didn't win the lottery too or had a dead uncle, who left him a fortune. Nice fantasy. At least he was not one of those wimpy cuckolds lurking around here. in many of these Loving Wives' stories.

Good catch on the Glock-19. I had a SIG P226 in an earlier draft, but later changed it and didn't catch the continuity error. First story, hard to get every single detail right!

This must be a prank. At least I’ll treat it that way. A hammer on a Glock? Riyad? Dog kibble? This was amusing but has zero substance.

Oh, this was absolute, utter nonsense. He kicks her out, then moves to Saudi Arabia with two beautiful young women and then sees his destitute wife in Saudi Arabia as well? His destitute wife who was living under a bridge now has the dough to fly to Riyadh and yet is still an apparently homeless person? I must have missed something cause this makes absolutely no f-ing sense!

Are you 12

Wonderful way to make fun of a whole genre.

Please, I know the stories on this site are fiction, but they should some semblance of reality

If this is satire, it’s actually amazing lmao

Total waste of ink.

Dear Literotica,

Can I get my reading time back?

Some "revenge" is just plain evil, she turned him into someone he was not, I would have hired her as the maid. She'd have employment, spending money, and a "small" maid quarters. All the while seeing what she fucked off! Sweet 💓

I quit on this mess two stars.

please stop writing ,you obviously dont know how to write a story................

Glock 19 with a hammer ? Please try a little research .

How to I get a refund? Although the read was free.....I spent too much! U got the right idea but it's shallow as hell dude!

hint: Glocks don't have exposed hammers to 'cock back'. It's striker fired, and there is no way to 'ease the hammer back forward' either. If you're going to pretend to know something about a gun, even listing a specific model (another hint, the model wouldn't be hyphenated, either). Just one of a ton of unrealistic elements for such a short, incomplete, and flawed 'story' attempt.

This is such a stupid story

I can only assume this was intended as a parody of the entire genre of btb stories, but written by some delusional, confused cuck. Sorry, that was redundant. Of course we all know how cucks are without restating the obvious.

?????!!!??

Way out

Try fantasy

I might be more shallow than I have previously thought, but this is putrid .

1 star for failing to make this parody even slightly amusing. Pitiful stuff really.

What absolute crap...why bother wasting your and our time, please retire from 'writing' I use the term loosely

I hope this garbage is recyclable, but from reading it, much of it already is. This was the dumbest line in the context of where it was in this story: >>"Rock, you weren't supposed to find out!"<< Come on, OP, there was no emotion, no feeling except MC's butthurtness, and even that was silly a juvenile. The wife was like a prop. Also, unless MC kills the Lothario as part of an interstate crime, a Federal crime, on Federal property or under certain other special provisos, he's going to State Prison, not Federal. Too short, too silly and too many loose ends. Your one saving grace, is that unlike 99.9999% of the other writers on here, the aged wife wasn't still a stone fox, impervious to the ravages of time, childbirth and aging. Two stars.

Dude, you need to build a story. This was like bullet points put together. Details, details, details....

Good story.... but, Glocks don't have hammers.

Hey, wait a minute...it's not April fool's day, is it?

Has to be brilliant satire, as no one would have written this a serious piece. Speaking of a serious piece, you should have stuck with the 226. But even with that particular pistol is so smooth that you don’t get that loud click when you pull back the hammer.

Too stupid to rate, or comment on. But thanks for the effort.

You have a long way to go my man.

Props, though, for having the guts to put this out in the world.

LOL - brilliant!

This is just ridiculous. It is to laugh.

Obviously written by a chatbot.

What the hell was this? Skimmed through this garbage only. To weird to read. Like someboud pointed out, too stupid to rate.

Too much over the top with cliche for my taste. Zero character development, and the plot could probably be described in one sentence.

Medication time, medication time.

Do a little research on the props you use. A Glock 19 is a striker fire, double action only, pistol, (ie no exposed hammer). Then the twins things was a little over the top, but hey this is fiction after all. Solid three stars.

Nothing but trash, wasn't any emotion in the story, not even a real story to even consider getting into, my pet pig that can't read or write does better work than this rolling around in the mud zero stars from me

Ridiculously unreal, but wouldn't it be nice?

A glock has no hammer to pull back

Hahaha. Many of the commenters thought this was serious! And they complain about your description of the gun!! Hahahahaha. BTB lunatics are hilarious. 😆

Started badly with the puking and went downhill from there. Why even bother writing jf this is the best you can do?

What a pathetic load of fucking rubbish