All Comments on 'Sheena's New Girlfriend'

Enjoyed that very much. Something a little different. Hopefully there will be more to come.

Someone took some care to get this one right, and that's commendable. Slacker-authors take note: THIS is how it's done right, without cliches and avoiding insulting the reader's intelligence! Bravo!

yes do write another chapter

This was a great story and I would love to see what happens next but can you go more in depth with the sex if continued please.

I would like to thank everyone for their encouraging posts and have taken notice of them all. I would have answered by email, but all comments are anonymous! And yes I will definately go into the sort of depth in the sequal(s) as I did in my first story, Plaything.

I honestly prefer Shemale/Female relationships myself, that's part of the reason I clicked on this one. All in all, Sheena was an interesting character, I found her both sympathetic and not due to her past and her choices. although I would have liked to see more interaction between her and Andrea before the big reveal. It feels like she did the "man thing" of betraying her best friend due to lust, and I would have liked to see more hints that she was actually in love with Andrea before getting in to bed with her. But her past made her sympathetic in spite of that take on the situation, so she was more complex than it seems at first glace. Not bad at all.

Are you planning on writing any stories that are purely female/shemale romance? I'd love to see more of that. True lesbian shemale stories are so rare. The shemale/abused male or shemale/male story is by far more common and I think we need more stories with relationships like the one that was hinted at here with Sheena/Andrea.

Where is the guilt? Before he catches them, Andrea and Sheena have zero guilt as to what they did. Heck, the man was wounded while Andrea was cheating on him, and Sheena charged out naked and saw him hurt.

Yes it was odd but the man was concussed and semi-concious therefore things do not always register to aomeone in that dream-like state. When he recovered his memouries were confused and partial. Also, perhaps he was subconciously in denial - and the memouries were being supressed. I did consider all of this as I wrote the story but I do agree with you there really is something odd - the Human Mind. Thanks for the comment - there is more to come - EVENTUALLY.

I meant that Sheena and Andrea felt no guilt for betraying him, their best friend and husband. He was hurt and stumbled in on them having sex, and they just went along like nothing was wrong. He was *hurt* in a fight and while he was getting the crap knocked out of him, they were betraying him. I'd feel guilty as all get out if I had betrayed my friend or spouse and they came stumbling in like that. Heck, I'd feel guilty just If I'd betrayed my spouse.

That's what is odd to me, they only seem to feel guilty that they got caught, not that they betrayed him, it's odd given how their characters are presented in the other portions of the work.

Hi again Annonymous. Yes I see your point and you are correct... That is sloppy writing on my part and I am going to have to do something about it. I initially intended Sheena to be a lot more Bimbo-ish than she turned out and Andrea to be harder... Oh! This is a tough one - thanks for pointing it out... I guess that I should through it open to the readers: any ideas folks? And no, the marriage isn't breaking down although there are (as was stated) three people in it.

Please post any ideas that you have to help me get out of this plot hole, I'm counting on you!

K.

If I hadn't already read "All Girls Together," I might have suggested that Andrea could still turn into a Milly-like hard character and Sheena into Wendy. Then Andrea and Sheena could have pressured Tony into a slightly gender-disoriented shemale or a full-blown transgender. But that won't work now; you'd be accused of plagiarizing yourself. What I would do now, I think, is to write about Donald's aunt and how she transformed him into a her, complete with introspection of how this has liberated Sheena. Perhaps that may give you some more insight into who Sheena really is. Then you can use that to advance the story of her relationship with Tony, perhaps bringing a reformed Luigi into it?

Don't you get tired of people who comment as "Anonymous"?

I would like to thank you whole heartedly for your email. I am in the process of writing a sequal (I work on about six stories simultaneously) and planned to include a short flash back to try to fill the plot holes that you were kind enough to point out... Only thing is, the flash back isn't going to be a short one now!

Once again, thank you, your email is causing a lot of other things to click into place, besides the ones that you suggested.

You should definitely keep going!

more please

Lovely story leaving me begging for more

Just to let anyone know; there is definately a sequel on the way... Look out for 'Sheena's New Husband', due later this year.

Super story with just a few faults, but only faults because of what was left out.

I love cheating wives/cuckold stories, I don't know why as I believe I'd blow a fuse if it ever happened to me, but there's something about the whole slut wife/innocent hubby thing. And this one had all the right ingredients.

All the characters were convincing and likable but I'd like to have read more about Andrea and Sheena; how they got to be lovers, what their thoughts and emotions were etc. They met by chance and suddenly they were in bed together, no lead up, no seduction on either side, and worst of all no descriptions of the sex they had together, but as the author that was your prerogative.

I thought also that the discovery was a little too easy and unemotional. Maybe another page or so could have expanded and justified the pseudo lesbian relationship as well as the eventual three way. These are just my personal views and not what I think should have happened but what I would have liked to have seen happen.

The story was well written and engaging, a nice twist on what is usually found under this subject. I for one would like to read more about these characters especially Sheena and Andrea, I believe you've created two very hot females and it'd be a shame to let it go.

Thanks and five stars from me.

the theme was good, but the story was too hard to follow,

Very disconnected storytelling. You switch styles and perspectives of the story’s presentation which in itself can be okay. However, when you do you interject the previous character into the change, which makes the whole story difficult to follow. I also think you should leave the “(attempts at humor)” out of your writing style, it’s confusing, breaks the character’s story and aren’t as funny as I’m sure you think they are. Stick to telling the story and work on your transitions of perspective to make your writing smoother. Good start, good luck going forward.

Lovely story…

Tony ended up being cuckolded by his Wife and his Shemale Bestfriend almost to the point of divorce.But thankfully Sheena and Andrea were so overcome with grief they confessed to Tony,and knew they were lucky to have him in their lives.

I don't think Sheena and Andrea set out to hurt or betray Tony intentionally but they did hurt him involuntarily alas Tony found Sheena attractive and beautiful like his Wife Andrea,and so he weighed his options and came to the conclusion that he loved both Andrea and Sheena (despite her having a cock),and chose to forgive both of them as long as he could be part of the threesome.

And so Tony,Sheena,and Andrea became a Family Threesome,not your typical story but atleast it was a "Happily Ever After" one.