All Comments on 'She's Mine Now'

Very good!

That he wouldn't recognize his sister even with a blindfold, or know her voice is rubbish.

Hope there is a.part 2

Typing away busily . . . Busily typing away . . . ?

Fascinating tale, even here.

I REALLY LIKED THIS ONE. Your write well and maintain the action throughout the story.

Great story. You need a part 2, to explore their relationship going forward

Pretty good. If you put aside the thought that you could talk to your sister and not recognize her voice. Still, well written. I've had the fantasy of cumming in my little sister's pussy for years, I still do, so a story like this strikes a chord with me. I'll forever wonder what it would be like and often I imagine it would be so much better than any other woman I've been with. Thank you.

please continue

It seems like you've got a built-in story series. You can explore the stories of each of the women who come to use your services. Some want a specific activity: get their pussy eaten, anal sex, toes sucked, etc. Others want a specific person: old boyfriend, celebrity, high school teacher, etc. Each one has a story and they are all waiting for you to tell them.

Your female characters need more detail. You never describe what they look like.

if you would please continue

Excellent concept and setting...extensive and lavish potential for development...5* + favourite point...warm, welcoming style, tone, tempo and likeable characters

This story could use (at least) one detailed prologue to setup many of the only lightly-touched premises, vis. "one of his friends" - "year-long study" - "word got around" - and a host of others, such as physical descriptions, that could enrich your story by fleshing-out the current, frankly, sketchy details

More detail about...well...everything, really...would vividly support the development of the plotline

Another aspect I missed getting was conflict/resolution...diamonds require pressure to form properly

Please don't think I am 'piling on', I like what you've got and how you've done it, and enhancements are easily done

Nice tale...CINCO ESTRELLAS!

Loved this was just sbeautiful I ofter came on my sisters pussy never inside her

Story brings back memories thank you

It doesn't work. Mask or not he would have known her the moment he walked in the room.