All Comments on 'Shipwrecked!'

Different. Hard to read and stay engaged for me. I think it must have been fun for you. The out-of-character interjections were distracting and were always taking it away from the fantasy. So many of these stories are just fiction, in spite of claims to the contrary, but fourth wall was so broken that the rest of the story failed. Sorry for me; but good luck for you. Relive this and relish this for you.

Sorry, but the transcript didn't work with me. The whole bro sis was awkward and intruded in the story, made it seem forced and clinical.

Since role play is a widdle kids game are the players 5 and 6 yrs old? Next, I'll be the daddy and you be the mommy...

did nothing for me i found it very hard to get into and honestly i gave up on it try another way this totally not the way to go

While I'm sure the RP session was hot A.F. for you, it completely fails as a "story". the [ Bro▸/ Sis▸] thing is cumbersome and the constant switching perspective breaks immersion. Sorry

" Also, please forgive the spelling errors. "

Why??

Couldn’t get into the story

Instead of writing it as a transcript, you should have written a story.

could not read it, the whole Bro-Sis thing ruined it.

???Oops

Dreadful, write a proper story instead of this gibberish.

Bro\Couldn't sis read bro it..bro\sis, bro\ bro\sis

wtf did I just see - please re-edit this into a readable version

I couldn’t even read the damn story because of transcripts!

Hey it was ok as far as those saying unable to follow are you idiots unable to understand bro is brothers side and guess what sis is sisters side. There are a couple points were you went different directions but thats from it being a interactive roleplay not my turn your turn based. Also you slipped up and didn't fully remove sis name as bro called her Sara a couple of times.

Thanks everyone for the comments, this is an actual transcript as-is from an RP I did here (with only the handles and names replaced for anonymity, and some spell check). Sorry it you did not like, it was damn fun for both of us who participated in this RP and I thought there would be people who would like to read and enjoy. :)

Thanks again!