All Comments on 'Shipwrecked on Mermaid Isle Pt. 01'

Hot and interesting. Hope to see more!

Wow! Thanks for reading. I have written most of the first 3 stories and have plans for 15 stories so far... I've never written such a large story, so I'm not sure how long it will take to tell the whole tale. I'm so glad you enjoyed!

Hi. Just my opinion, overwritten with the extended description getting in the way of everything else. Take a look at the style of story below. It's sparse yet intense. "[The] God of Mischief and Lies" - Loki finds something he can't control. https://www.literotica.com/s/god-of-mischief-and-lies

Best of luck...

Any more?

Thanks for the feedback! I am a very descriptive writer, but I understand what you mean. The point behind the "overwriting" is that this is a story set in an outlandish, fantasy world; if I was writing about a man in 2018 having sex with multiple female partners, the style would be different.

This is a tale of a simple sailor who has limited sexual experience surviving a shipwreck, being rescued by mermaids and becoming their sexual plaything; it's an over the top and outlandish fantasy. I hope you enjoy!!

Just checking.

The story is definitely not over! I have written the first 3 stories and have started working on the fourth. I have plans for at least 15 stories. I hope you enjoy the Sailor's journey...

If it is a multi-part story, you don't have to put the end after each chapter. This confuses the reader. The end is THE END.

Hi Anonymous, It's a multi-chapter story. I have plans for 14 chapters so far. Enjoy!

A sequel is coming! It is called Indulgence on Mermaid Isle... Part 1 is almost done.

COMING SOON.