All Comments on 'Shub-Niggurath's Disciple'

by TE999

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 6 years ago
Nice.

Short but very evocative. You definately captured that HPL vibe.

5*

simonlilithsimonlilithabout 10 years ago

I've always had a weak spot for Lovecraft - I think he would have approved of the format!

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
good story, but...

Too short. A Lovecraft story would've done a better job building up the suspense, the climax. Still a very good idea, too good to waste. Also, more tentacles, lol, please.

SecondCircleSecondCircleover 10 years ago
They would be proud....

Great use of the mythos. I like the idea of using the recorder, and telling the story through the interview. It's a nice change of pace and has the reader constantly searching for answers and clues.

I do sorta wish that they would have let her tell a lot more of the story. Maybe more in depth about the scene when she caught them, and the sex, might have bumped up the eroticism. And perhaps a little more on her relationship to the old ones.

Other than that, holding back some of the details was wise I think. Good job and great Halloween entry.

patientleepatientleeover 10 years ago
I like what you did with this!

I like the format of this a lot. Good story.

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
Good Job

You know how to use dialog correctly.

Nemo18Nemo18over 10 years ago
Should be reclassified

Why is this erotic horror?

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