All Comments on 'Simon Says'

Definitely want to hear more about Steph too

enoyed but needs a better end or a part 2

Hoping to get three chapters then depending on how popular it is to maybe revisit for some chapters with Steph.

All feedback welcome.

First story I have published and all that. :-)

Actually, I read the second chapter first (by accident) and loved it. So came here to see how it started. Thumbs up!

I love the raw writing style, with the transparent thoughts. It reveals a sexy and humorous mind, which is a great combo. I'm really looking forward to reading more. I loved how the friend put her (you) on speakerphone. Even though they couldn't see or hear anything, it makes the exposure seem so vivid and present. So yeah, write more. Lots more.

The writing was very good, but the story didn’t interest me.

Bill S.

Re-read I gave it 4 stars last time I've increased it to five I just like your style. One sexy young lady. Your quip about the expression on the dogs face being similar to the ex-boyfriend's made me chuckle. Onto chapter 2.