by Cocktopia
Good jack-off story...Maybe a little rough for me....
At least learn something about what you're writing. It's clear from this rant that you have no clue.
"...and without doubt psychotic." It is your story, but since you opened it to comments...have to say that I think the author of this story is psychotic.
Disturbingly psychotic.
Dom = male
Domme = female
Twink - not huge bald muscular, and generally not hung like a horse. Generally smaller stature, thin build, effeminate/cute/pretty.
Your in-charge character's sex appeal was destroyed long before she made a face.