All Comments on 'Sister/Genie Ch. 05'

Okay, I definitely dropped you down to a three this time. I really don't like the direction that this has taken. You're basically turning your main character into a gold digging whore. There's nothing arousing about your story now. Jaya has totally disappeared on Jasmine. Jasmine is aware that she's in some kind of trouble with the law. Have you not put yourself into the shoes of your characters? Jasmine would be totally alone and destroyed by grief. You killed their parents off early in the story. Jaya is Jasmine's whole world!

I'll keep reading a little bit more and I hope that you can turn this into a happier tale. But for now it really sucks. 😕 3/5

Alright, the title makes sense now, ... and I woman with a sex genie, and a need to start a new life, might make Jaya's choices, ... I'll stick with this tale a bit longer, ... but this chapter was very intriguing, thank you for your time and effort, most appreciated, and who will the twins flash next? ... ;-) TTFN

The premise of her being on the run from the cops, is kind of shaky I mean, they wouldn’t break down the door for a stolen artifact Or be looking for her continuously. And she hasn’t even looked into what exactly they’re trying the charge her with, but she runs any time she sees a cop? 1 time panic response is one thing, but repeatedly it’s kind of dimwitted