All Comments on 'Sister in Law Moves In'

Every man's fantasy.

Sue is being portrayed as a complete idiot and no respect for her husband. Needs to send her packing.........

Loved it. wouldn't mind reading more of this family. maybe becoming a nudist family. having Ann actually witnessing the sex between mom and BIL.

5 Stars. I love reading about all the love.

Not the best of 'H' stories I've read here. Competently written, with the usual spelling mistakes and errors that we all make. Karmon, the story will read better if you decide which tense you are in. Present? Or Past? Switching tenses is a distraction. Otherwise, bravo.

Keep this story line going

Five stars for concept and content, but the tense changes were distracting, Present tense is hard enough to read anyway, and the constant switching, sometines in the same paragraph, made it worse. I rfecommend using past tense.

Excellent story and concept, good work! As some others have mentioned, the grammar errors are distracting. There's a healthy proofreader/editor community, if you're willing. You could also send me a PM and I'd be happy to help in the future. Keep writing and thanks for sharing!

Total mismatch of tenses. Grammar awful. Punctuation poor.

I got to about halfway, but couldn't bear to waste any more of my life on it.