by oggbashan
Idea was fine, but the ending seemed a bit rushed... I would say try again, same story but make it a little longer...
I READ 3 PARAGRAPHS AND ALMOST THREW UP!
Forced rape! I hope they all spend the next 50 years being sodomized by a 280 pound black convict who is their new cell mate!
Total disgust.
I intend to complain that this does not belong in incest?
The final paragraph could've been part two of the story.
Like the whole idea you have going here. Hope to read more!
"Hey everyone, we're going to gang rape this woman and don't worry about her pressing charges even though she knew the house she came to, saw many of you, and will likely have all of the physical evidence she's likely to need."
Definitely turns the whole dominance and submission scene into a criminal group.
just read this and wonder what kind of friend takes her to a party to be raped by her brother?i mean what kind of fucked up was she?then to have the 2 sibs repeat the sex later like she wasnt raped was just as dumb since it madkes the rape seem like it was ok since she knew the guy.
Up until then the story was a 5, but that last paragraph knocked it to a 4.
So sorry, but this walked right over my ethics.. I don't need enforced and abused victims.. It was kind of sad and not very enjoyable.. Yoron
Why this story doesn't have a big red H listed next to its title is completely beyond me. This is one of the greats. Short, but remarkably detailed, with a great ending, leaving just enough up to the reader's imagination (in which Freda's well-deserved punishment will be more appropriate than if anyone had actually written it down) to warrant some thought.
Not what I expected, but then again, you can never be sure with an Oggs story :) Glad I was warned of the category. Takes a very good author to write something like this and still have it come off as fun.
-Colly
Bravo, Ogg you are such a natural writer! Everything flows so wonderfully and your excellent offbeat ideas are seemingly never ending. The nun costume idea was novel and developed masterfully. You may be interested in my latest contest entry, Who Killed Lois Laynes? , which should be posted in a couple of days! (an erotic murder mystery!)
A tricks a trick...he he he there all treats, <grin> Great tale and good luck (*_*) Happy Halloween~ Art
As the sex manuals all insist, it's quality not quantity that counts. Good work, Og
Rumple Foreskin
I'm not into revenge - but didn't she SO deserve it!
Great stuff. More, please!
Lukas
my favorite type of erotica is the mistaken identity. This had a nice twist to it.
But very erotic. I liked the ending, I'm into revenge. Just kidding and good luck Ogg.