by exfireman
EROTIC, HUMOR, AND A LITTLE DRAMA. THIS STORY COULD BE LITEROTICA'S TOP 10 STORIES. KEEP IT GOING.
Run on sentences, run on paragraphs and too much ass play that seems wrong. With the awful lovemaking with unreal ass play and the poor pacing and structure I am going to quit here. The love story and romance were good though.
even with all the spelling and grammar mistakes i still enjoyed this so keep it up.
Storyline is excellent, the spelling and grammar needs a little work. Author should have a editor or at least someone to proof read. On content gets my 5 star vote.