by oddsandends
Enjoyed the thought of brother and sister fucking... I would have love to fuck my sister.... she is married now... but I still fantasize about having her suck my cock until I cum... and then fucking her too..
I prefer a bit more build up. I find it beyond the realms of what is believable to accept that a brother and sister would so readily start fucking each other without the slightest hint of doubt or caution. I could stretch my mind to accept this scenerio if it were cousins perhaps but I have trouble with siblings deciding that screwing each other is fine based entirely on the realisation that each of them is kind of attractive and they're all horny.
It's not badly written and the premise is promising, I'd just like to see it drawn-out, given some tension and a smidge of reality regarding possible hesitation and emotion. Once you've established why they're able to break the taboo, how they've justified it to themselves and each other, then you can have them pounding away. I find it more entertaining if an author is able to create a situation which is at least plausible and unfortunately I don't think siblings in the real world behave like your characters.
Just a few thoughts, obviously it's your writing and it's up to you. I'm just voicing my opinion, if you're happy with it then that's fine.
You should continue, and make another story of Joey recieving early leave. Then, coming home to find Sarah and Bobby together. That would be a sexy twist. Think about it.
I like that the sister happily opens up her adorable little coochie for both of her brothers, Joey and Bobby. A sister's cute little twat should be communal property for her brothers, waiting there to house their big stiff pricks and receive all the great big doses of creamy semen they've got in their brotherly balls. That's what a sister's twat is for.
Great pair of stories.
Loved the both brothers sharing their sexy sister.
Can’t wait for the boys to have a Therrsome with Sarah.