All Comments on 'Skinny Dip'

my wife told me... she was not bragging just a telling... I do love the spas off the deck these days smiling

more back story and more internal feelings. How were the couples after the deed was done? The story also lacked tension. Tension and resolution are necessary in story telling.

and shit

Goddamn, I would love to do this with my husband and another couple we know!

needs more detail In the orgasim . the lead up was great but lacked detail in the finale., could continue in the room.

As others have mentioned, you need to do more to explain to us what is going through their heads. Just I did this, and then did this doesn't really do it. How did the swap affect them emotionally? Was everybody peachy keen? Nobody had any regrets? Didn't follow through in the motel room? Bring in conflict and drama!

The writing mechanics are good, but story development needs work. You obviously have the technical skills to write a really good story. .

Chilley

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Use spell check or an editor. The story needs either, or both.

Not so great as a reality! Folks, natural lubrication is very water-soluble. It gets dissolved much faster than it gets generated! Squeaky is a term which describes this delightful concept! Bet neither of the couples had the foresight to bring Vaseline. Lard works also, but tougher to carry on an impromptu beach walk! Lighter lubes are barely better than natural!

Great that they didn't do this in the SURF. Forget the Makos, its the little sand particles that will get you. (Sand is the 'active' ingredient in sandpaper. If it is really fine -usually the case- neither of you will notice until a few hours later ... but epidermis WILL grow back! Eventually!)

Story is OK, but banal! No particular drama! Maybe if it had been a man-made grotto with no lighting ... and no 'Marco' 'Polo' location/ID allowed!

3*

Continue this story.. please!

what a HASTY conclusion. are you too lazy to elaborate? this story is just as lame as 'couples' massage'. do you have any other ideas? boring...😒

cuck shit.

Anon has a discerning eye.

A quick, simple and fun story.

unfetters a bunch of old Taboos, TK U MLJ LV NV