All Comments on 'Slavery Ch. 11'

I hope you are not going to have her with his wife that would be such a complete turn of and would hate to have her betray him yet again. Now I you will probably have him bed his wife just to piss me of. I like his family so far. Please let her show some intelligence for a change and stick to Kalen and only him!!!!

What about her birth control pills. All we need now is for her to have his child although if she doesn't make it through child birth he can always have his wife back. LOL

Really enjoyed an reading about his family, nice to have some humor. Totally irritated with Kalen treating her roughly again! Alana feeling guilty made me nearly scream with frustration, wish she would be really angry with him for once. It's about time she got some parameters set for this new life of hers, didn't realize that by asking it made her feel more like a slave, but if it stops her being hurt or making mistakes it's well worth it! Your stories certainly don't let you sit on the fence in regards to feelings and that's why I enjoy reading them so much. Hope you can post soon. Thanks. M

compliment to you on a good story and interresting plots with all the twists and confusing turns. And the good jobb that you created with all the new world. It's just Alana's charector , her dialoig , the way she think and actions that tick me off. I believe that if she stop to think before act and realize that she is a SLAVE in an alien planet and doesn't have a true friend or know some one she should be careful. She should act loveable not hateable. If her master is not Kalen she might be punish really baad or been given away to entertain her master's soldiers and other generals.

I think kalen still has difficult time trusting alana. I think they are moving in the right directiion. It bugs me when people think that when they listen people from different culture that it is wrong bcz it doesnt wotk for them. And didnt like how alana thinking that she is still a slave if she asked him how to act. I think that it is nice when u ask parnter male or female what they want from each other. So i hope they learn from each other instead trying to be boss. For me i like it when my husband ask me what he excepts and i do the same. I think people do what they want to do and dont care if it hurts the other person, if it makes them happy. Example when kalen went to trail and alana only cared for her pleasure. What felt right to her. Best of luck with to both of them and this a great story

This is why you are one of my favorite authors.

I think they may just be starting to communicate better. Hope they can find happiness. I think Alana should get pregnant and let them do the C section. It's what they both really want. I think it would do the whole family good.

This is going to be a tough world for her to adjust to.

I'm not sure why there is so much dislike for Alana. She's trying to survive as a slave but getting mixed messages from her Azeric/Master. And it seems clear to me, she is more to him than a slave as well. How much more, remains to be seen which is why (well just one of the reasons) i keep coming back for more. But let's give Alana some credit. She has learned a new language (even if downloaded in her brain), can drive an alien spacecraft, and has suffered rather brutal physical attacks - meant for either abuse or sexual pleasure. I like a little rough play, but getting bitten with razor sharp teeth each time my partner wants to climax does not sound too appealing. Add to that having to understand a pretty complicated family dynamic. I hope she continues this growth, fights back for her freedom so she can be Kalen's wife rather than a slave...with plenty of babies whose human genes soften the birthing so she doesn't need to be cut open...but I'm more interested in Poison Alice's vision, not mine...

This was an excellent chapter! I can't wait for the next. Alice, you are wonderful!

Every time she explains her feelings or makes a request, he honors it. When she doesn't say what she is thinking/feeling she ends up getting hurt. She shouldn't fear him, she just needs to set some boundaries. It wouldn't hurt to actually listen to him either.

Still don't like her but I'm looking forward to more.

Besides my new clarity, I love Kalen's family, even Olivine seems like she's going to be bitchy-fun.  I absolutely loved when Kalen found Alana with Olivine.  It seemed like an "uh oh what did Alana do now" moment, but it was Kalen's misunderstanding, and Alana explained herself perfectly.  And then I loved how Alana asked Kalen for clarification on what she can and can't do.  I didn't feel like she was whining or acting entitled.  She didn't ask as his "slave" or as his "lover", she was asking as someone who cared for him and his feelings.  Alice, that was BRILLIANT!

In the last few chapters, I was so frustrated because I loved Alice's writing, but Alana drove me nuts.  

 AntoinetteM captured it perfectly in chapter 10's comments; Alana's faults made her more "real".  The stories here that I love are about insecure girls who quickly develop into strong women.  I just didn't feel any character growth happening to Alana.  To me, she was constantly impulsive and constantly whined.  

Alana drives me nuts because she is so real, so much like me, and I'd hope I would be different.  The "realness" totally struck a nerve for me in this chapter.  I am worse than Alana when it comes to the cold.  Coming off the pod I would've wrapped myself in a fur cocoon and demanded Kalen carry me.  Yes, "demanded" even though I know I am his slave.  

Please please please be updating soon!!! I'm hooked and just can't get this story out of my mind! I love it & can't wait to read more. I wish I could have it in hardback it's so good! Way better than anything else on this site or any other site for that matter. I truly love this & hope to see more soon

That consistently painful tearing sex is not hot. I guess other girls like that but this story makes my vagina cringe. And Kalen? I cant like him, for various reasons.

Ahhh!! please update!!! you are evil for leaving me all sad!! I love your story!!! xoxox

get that feeling again that this story will not be finished, we have gone from having chapters posted in very quick succession to now being drawn out. So am starting to wonder if that was the last one you are going to post leaving it unfinished as so many on lit have done.I hope I am wrong I find it hard to get involved in stories these days in fear that they won't be finished as so many of my favourite tales have done on lit.

I found the story well formated and very well planed. With my history with the new york times i can say that with a little work this could be a best seller

updated on your Bio tab, please. That way you can let us know what is going on....I am sure we would all appreciate it. This story of Kalen and Alana is a FREAKIN' fantastic and I am checking every day to see if you've sent in another chapter, so please don't make us wait....I beg of you!!!!

Please come back and add another chapter, I love this story!

Hi! The next chapter was submitted several days ago. It does seem to be taking longer than usual to get through all of the checks, so not sure if something is wrong with it. I had expected it to already be on here, but when it will materialise is, unfortunately, now out of my hands! If there is a problem with the file I uploaded, I will make every effort to rectify the issue imeadiately. I can only appologise for the delay.

Alice

going to be checking every 5 minutes now!

I can't wait!