All Comments on 'Slut Fun On The Stairs'

Should work on the details of the sex. It seems like you're rushing through the parts...can be improve.

You may be right on needing more of a description, but it was fast, at most it was 15 minutes start to end and I was trying to give you the impression of how fast it was. I guess I didn't do that well enough :( Please leave me an email address so I don't have to vote on my own work ,)

Emap

to be having a great time writing these stories. I am having fun reading them also. Just a quick note, to say; try re-reading them over slowly to check for left out words that will make your story flow better. I know that when writing that my mind always works faster than I can type; then when it is re-read there are some words left out that needed to be there. Not enough to make a major difference, but it does make you stop and try to figure out what word(s) are needed to complete the sentence.

Greatjob, keep up your writing, it will only get better.

George

Enjoyed your two stories and look forward to more of the "real life adventure" that you seem to enjoy writing about. you have certainly peaked my interest when you state, "well, that's another story". I do hope you write about those.

As far as more detail, you could do a little more, but sometimes a little causes one to use imagination and that it good.

Keep the stories coming, no pun intended :-).

I'm sorry, was there a story in that ramble somewhere?