by sds195
Sort of a good story. The first 4 chapters were very good but the last two, the writing got very messy like you couldn't wait to end it.
I love that she became a smoker. I think it'd be hot if there's chapter 7. If jen lit a cigarette in from of her mom. As just a instinct without thinking when she wakes up.
Very hot, very well done! And so many twists and turns for future stories. Nicole? Amy? The Mom? So many delicious possibilities. Keep at it!
I fully admit that I detest smoking. As such I never have read erotica where smoking as a fetish was a part of the story. It's always been a non-starter for me. BUT this story kept me fully engaged AND erect for all 6 pages. So yeah SMOKING BABYSITTER very much earned 5 stars from me and I rarely exceed 4. Very impressive, sds!
You were warned at the beginning. If you don't like it: GO FUCK YOURSELVES!!!!
Is smoking bad for you? Yes! Does it kill? Yes! But lack of a creative imagination and a boring sex life kills you faster. Also...why read a story with a clear warning and then give a 1 star vote to the author based on the very same thing you've been warned not to read if it offends you?
This story is very hot, and would probably do much better in the fetish category. Looking forward to reading more of your stories dear sds.
I read this because it was a fetish related story. Sexually good job, smoking wise my only suggestion would be to take a little more time to develop the smoking aspect, rarely does anyone take to it that quickly and easily, throw in the addiction aspect, etc...
Really hot smoking story that I really enjoyed. I did read your notice at the beginning and I'm confused why the one reader complained that you over did it with the smoking?? This is a fetish story about smoking so I think you did a great job thx for sharing I hope you do more of these as I have a huge smoking fetish. I do not however have the gift you do to write stories. Again thank you keep up the good work!!
I remember babysitting for a couple and the daddy being a hot older guy.The smoking thing did not bother me at all.However I did notice that Nicole's biker boyfriend was 42 then 44 so the age was a bit off when you mentioned it a couple times.The babysitter should of saved herself for the daddy and not used the dildo first.I think it ruined the first time experience.But I mostly liked the older man/younger woman sex and the flirtations leading up to it.
Well written, and it was an engaging story, wondering how things would work out. Def hot.
i know you said there would be smoking, but, you over did it with the smoking thing it took away from the story, it was hard to get though the whole story to give it a chance, i was sick of reading about the fucking smokes, because of the smokes i gave this story a 1 star and i couldn't rate it any lower like to 0 also you kept saying she was 18 you only had to say that once we already knew she was 18 after the 1st time you wrote it. too many repeats about how beautiful the women were, we got the idea the 1st time you wrote it. you should scrap this story and put in trash and start over,
Please,more,more,smoked and stroked while reading this story,soooooooo hot !
I still remember in High School how the girls that smoked tasted, YECHHH!
And her friend, shorts, tee shirt, no helmet, no jacket, no gloves, very squiddly
Got a page and a half read and then could not read about another cigarette or I was going to dust the tower and the power.!** I quit smoking 7 years a go when I had Cancer of the mouth and until this day I am Cancer free and smoke free and feel great thanks to my decision !^ ( I really did try ~~ but it does build up the hype and the plus points about smoking.* ) { There are no good points.!!! } Sorry.
Very hot. Nice teasing build-up. Now he needs to take both of those "ass to die for" and take her other cherries.