All Comments on 'Snow Shoveling'

Definitely an excellent story! I believe you could continue with mowing, yard chores, and more. Mrs. Ortiz could be a cougar in need, and Julie’s married neighbor might want some youthful plaything. Maybe mom figures out what is going on and gets jealous and makes a surprising move on her son! So many options. The build up, pacing and story length are perfect!! Consider the possibility of an editor to help minimize typos.

I agree. There are quite a few typos, so a editor would be a great help.

But: Never mind the typos! Nice story! Got me nice and hard! Got me wishing I was Johnny, fucking Julie between her tits and getting a great blowjob from her. (The ice and the chocolate were nice touches!) We need to know about ALL THE WAY, soon....

Great first story, well done

Will be looking out for your next submission

Loved the ice and the hardened chocolate!

Although I would have gone with “plowed” for my fourth double entendre.

Entertaining, keep writing.

Nice light fun romp.

Please check usage of speech quotes. Running fifferent speakers in same paragraph makes it hard to follow. New speaker always begins with a new paragraph.

...a nice light bit of fun.

However, it's highly unlikely Julie's mother would also be Mrs Johnson. Her mother-in-law? Sure. And where's her husband, anyway? There's no mention of him being an ex.

Should have interacting conversation on separate lines.

Also, the "shudder" thing; & separate stories/Chapters for each neighbor to start.