All Comments on 'So This is Us Now?'

Love it. Hope there's another chapter.

Jan sounds like a dream! Please another chapter!!

It's in general a treat to read your story with the humorous style and flow of the dialogue/story. Can hardly be better.

However, a clear 5* was pulled down to 4* by two elements:

1. The various mouth to anus aspects are so unhealthy to be totally off-putting -- enough to lose a star by itself. (Although the protagonist strayed from further exploration of the one finger of hers ...)..

2. Your text is blemished by just too many irritating errors like missing or incorrect words or incorrect spelling. (Saying this as one who has English as a second language ....). These are things you likely would detect yourself if you had let the finished text rest for a couple of days, and then slowly read it aloud for yourself - or let anybody else read it before submitting.

But besides that, the text was so well written that I became curious on other stories of yours.

Very well written! Really enjoyed it!

Totally awesome

Where's chapter 2?

He needs to fill aunt Jan with his seed. How about chap 2.

Would love to read another chapter. Maybe have Jerry and Carol join them. Carol in a lezzie three way then have the boys take turns on each ladies ass.

Absolutely hot as hell! Love love love this story.

Please more chapters.

Loved it! So fucking hot! Five stars and a favorite point!

Put this in gay male

If you are going to have gay male sex in a story warn the reader first. If I knew that little fact I wouldn’t have read it and you wouldn’t have gotten a one star from me. Was a three star story but went down to one. Only have yourself to blame.

Well done. Of course there were some grammatical errors but nit picking doesn't change the fact that it's a good story that flows well without a lot of repetition, 10" cocks and massive tits. While guys like girl on girl stuff they almost always shy away from guy on guy action. My guess is they're afraid of losing their self proclaimed image of being manly. - they expect blow jobs from their women but won't eat pussy. Give me a beak. As a very old straight guy I do like to see some gay male action and truth be told over the past several years I've wondered what it would be like to suck a cock. I think I would enjoy it. Having said this the two kids experimentation with sucking cock is a nice touch but surely doesn't change your story into being in the gay male category. I plan to read the rest of your writings.