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This is fun, but the descriptions of the characters are written really weirdly. I know that you want to avoid a big block of descriptive text, but giving the reader a tiny little bit at a time is distracting. Half of the time the details are unnecessary and other half are made really strange because you describe the characters passively.

For example: “He grabbed the massive curly Afro belonging to the submissive partner.”

This is a weird way to tell us that Winnie has an Afro - surely Jerrell would have seen it when they first had their video chat? Why not describe it then? Is also strange that you’re not using the character’s name - why not just say “He grabbed Winnie’s massive curly Afro”?